tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11380429.post115264029659921318..comments2023-03-29T07:33:35.853-07:00Comments on Great Blogs of Fire: Part 2: "Burning Hate"Kylehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14459912711528974289noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11380429.post-1152804106170005972006-07-13T08:21:00.000-07:002006-07-13T08:21:00.000-07:00Do you want critique? If so, change the word "sor...Do you want critique? If so, change the word "sorrowed" to "disturbed". It shows a more appropriate reaction. Or "cut". And your last sentence about the Hyenna is a fragment. <BR/><BR/>I do like it. It shows a lot of emotion. I was feeling your pain. The product of a spoiled marriage with haunting aftereffects can make exceptional reading. <BR/><BR/>Are you doing these as writing exercises? I think they are great. Keep it up. I'm looking forward to "Side Show".Mary Louhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13276239655439786223noreply@blogger.com